| Author | Message | ||
| R D McManes
Advanced Member Username: mac Post Number: 255 Registered: 03-2001 |
nothing formal about an affair…. i opened a can of ice cold beer (my favorite off brand) pour it slow *gotta watch the head* (i mean watch the foam) into my personalized un*autographed “Black Oak” mug with fancy smancy jim dandy (or maybe it’s jim dodie) logo extend my drinking pinky (simple sophistication if you must know) i wipe the extra foam on a causal sleeve sit my mug on the genuine one of a kind Elvis impersonator coaster $mustn’t leave a ring$ and think where is my dog before I take another drink and watch the timber dawn. an announcement from the karaoke machine: “Attention all party goers we will be serving something on the half shell with your choice of sides and a dinner roll one mint per table” this will be a long night i may need the other sleeve. Mac | ||
| Star
Member Username: star Post Number: 54 Registered: 11-2005 |
an enjoyable saga mac! great throwaway line - 'and think where is my dog'. whats a 'timber dawn'? great ending too - well done! star | ||
| Gary Blankenship
Senior Member Username: garyb Post Number: 6028 Registered: 07-2001 |
Bob, most cool, for the short list, and I love one mint per table” and of course and think where is my dog before I take another drink and watch the timber dawn. and the other sleeve. Smiles. Gary A River Transformed http://www.lulu.com/content/178110 . The Dawg House http://garydawg.blogspot.com/ . December's FireWeed http://www.mindfirerenew.com/ | ||
| SplinterGroup
Advanced Member Username: splinter Post Number: 956 Registered: 11-2003 |
"Black Oak" ? Hahaahahaha you're dating yourself ole partner. Welcome to the old hippie's retirement home and literary dumping grounds. Gald to see there is an new "old crusty" here. Great piece, reminds me of a bar in New Orleans in 1968. Well done descriptive and evocative piece. Congratulations! Addotto (one of many in SplinterGroup) | ||
| jennifer vanburen
New member Username: annaswirls Post Number: 15 Registered: 10-2005 |
oh this was too fun, those cranky guys are always the most funny to me somehow. anna www.mannequinenvy.com | ||
| R D McManes
Advanced Member Username: mac Post Number: 261 Registered: 03-2001 |
thank you all, looking forward to retirement in about 10 years at that new-fangled hippie home down the road. mac Mac | ||
| Kathy Paupore
Senior Member Username: kathy Post Number: 2820 Registered: 12-2003 |
Mac, enjoyed the read. One small suggestion here: I opened a can of ice cold beer (my favorite off brand) pour it slow a change in tense maybe change opened to open or add a to before pour  K |
